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It all started one day at church:
Nothing seemed to be wrong.
Two days until Christmas, I stood
Where I always belonged.

We sang as one, until I felt
That something wasn’t right.
I told her, and we left for the car:
Luckily, she didn’t fight.

All seemed to be well; nothing was wrong.
I no longer felt any danger.
We drove back home; we weren’t dismayed:
These events weren’t strangers

But when we approached the door, I knew
My feelings were for real.
When I heard my title from long before,
I knew our fate was sealed.

Evasiveness only worked for a while;
Resistance was for naught.
I told her to go, since I knew
I was the one they sought.

Despite my words, she didn’t leave;
My mindset growing fretful.
If she had gone, she’d still be here...
For that, I am regretful.

And now I stand in church again,
Only I’m wearing black.
Patterned glass still taunting me...
I just wish she could come back.
©2008-2009 ~booklover323
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Author's Comments

My brain: badpoembadpoemyepyepit'sforschooldon'tpostitondA

Well...I posted it anyways. ^^; Not one of my favorite poems...but it's better than the last one I submitted. >.>;

The title pretty much explains it all. The story of Julianna's death...from Shad's perspective. :(

The Patterned Glass line near the end is a reference to another poem of mine~[link]

For school. I had to write a ballad. Bleh. I liked the rhyme scheme, but the meter bugged me. So I took a bit of poetic license. ^^;

Did you know that, if a poem is a true ballad, you can sing it to the tune of Gilligan's island? :slow:

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:icondandibooks315:
:cry: JULIANNA COME BACK!


in other words.... sooo good!! :faint:

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It's better to be an authentic loser than a false success, and to die alive than to live dead.
:iconbooklover323:
Yeah. :cries: Thanks. :hug:

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:iconbubblegumsquishy:
wow. u don like it? i <3 it. Julianna!!

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cuz i pwn like that . . . . :evillaugh:
when u shake a bag of granola, all the big, crunchy ones go to the top.
whoa. :ohnoes:
i am not here
it's the midas touch!
DING!!!!
bye flantasy flan . . .
:iconbooklover323:
Well...it's okay. ^^; Just not as good as I think it could be...

Do you know who Julianna is? :aww:

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:icontemptress-confusion:
So...beautiful *O* ...yet so sad. T_T This, I think, is my favorite poem by you I've read. :D
:iconbooklover323:
Really? :omfg: It's drastically different than most of my poems since it's a narrative...so it is a bit out of my comfort zone. ^^; Usually I write my poems with all these cryptic messages and hidden meanings. :XD:

Not this one. It's pretty straightforward. :P

Thank youuu~~~:hug:

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:iconbubblegumsquishy:
unfortumatley, no. ^^;

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cuz i pwn like that . . . . :evillaugh:
when u shake a bag of granola, all the big, crunchy ones go to the top.
whoa. :ohnoes:
i am not here
it's the midas touch!
DING!!!!
bye flantasy flan . . .
:iconbooklover323:
Start here~[link]

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1 :heart: t3h r4nd0mn3ss! :aww:

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